Spin.
Gimme lucky three.
Click.
Third wife, a trio of kiddos, three-bedroom rancher. Once, in Reno, I rolled threesies, won 30k. Still owe that much on the trawler.
Spin.
Clickety-click. Click.
Now, damn boat’s on blocks — three years ’til the shrimp come clean. No jobs except drinking. Plum outta luck, one bullet left.
Spin.
Awesome what you crammed into so few words, Linda–a lifetime.
good stuff, linda, very evocative, strong character building on a word patch the size of a small stamp…love this
i like this. i want to hear it as an audio piece. i think it’d work really well.
yes, yes, an audio piece would be good … so short and dramatic, it’s over and then you realise its full impact!
whew. this story is truly loaded with a lifetime.
Like everyone else, i like the economy. The sounds resonate.
Thanks all for reading! I enjoyed the 55 word constraint, gives the story structure. I need to explore audioboo and other audio site — a friend taped CAN’T WAIT and it was powerful.
Slowly making the rounds here — life, ya know? Peace…
I really like this.
loaded story… pun intended.
nicely written and for the theme.
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