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The late-day shadows stretch out like nymphs on the lawn, reveling naked and dark in the warm golden-green grass. In islands they float on the surface, shifting, reaching, drifting apart. He sits in his chair reading. The umbrella is arced to slant its shade on the pages of the latest Grisham novel. His face too is bereft of the sun. I alone drink in its yellowness. I absorb it into my veins, the blood carrying it through my body like a waitress with a tray full of daiquiris sparkling in sugar-rimmed glasses. His drink is a masculine scotch on the rocks. Mine is a faceful of afternoon sun. An awning of tension hovers above us, its clarity accenting the lean of his body, elbows grounded for takeoff. His chair is angled away from mine by just enough. Mine is boldly straight out to the yard. “Are you still mad at me?” He grunts, doesn’t look up. A finger flips over the page, ready to hold his place should this turn into an argument. “I’m not mad at you,” he says. He looks out across the lawn, now spread with writhing shadows of maple and ash. “It’s Joe’s fault. Jesus, my best friend fucks my wife.” He snorts as if the air around us is thick, its transparency made of plastic-wrap. “I don’t blame you.” Icy daiquiris flow like a hot river within me. |
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Transparency by Susan Gibb
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“I don’t blame you.” Sure he doesn’t; I don’t believe him, and I’m guessing she doesn’t either. Well done, but not the best part. Best is that opening, and the language of the setting.
Thank you, Al. I somehow believe he’s as big a jerk as I suspect and really doesn’t blame her!
A big jerk, but not a total jerk? It’s your piece so of course it’s up to you, but if I’m to be brutally honest, I basically don’t trust men (knowing what liars we are) and was really responding more to that. :)
Al, it took me a long time to accept Roland Barthes into my heart and give up my hold on my words to the reader. You’re reading it right; what exists here is nothing I can insist upon. That’s the neat thing about people and story!
Ah, Mr. Barthes. I see we’ve suffered from the same dilemma, but I’ve reached the same point; the things we create do have their own life and speak differently to every reader. Of course, if they have no life, they cannot speak, so perhaps a richer interaction with the reader is a sign of life?
Love the imagery and poetic voice throughout. The ending confused me a bit, but otherwise a great scene. Nicely written.
Susan,
The scene is so tranquil, yet so tense. I love the two married together. As for the married couple, they’re as realistic as it comes. Kudos.
I particularly like the ending. Both punching and ambivalent…
Thanks for reading my stories and your kind words. I really appreciate it.
Adore that last line. Icy indeed. Loved it at fn, and like a fine wine, this story ages quite well. peace…
Very nice….I’ve been married for nearly twenty so I know that a Screaming-Knockdown argument could break out at any second. I had to ask the question of myself Best Friend or Wife….Thanks for sharing Susan.
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