| The Earth is stone, laid bare under an endless sky. All else is rotting flesh and vegetation.
BURIED HERE: THIS DATE AND TIME.
The sod conceals what remains while my tombstone festers, obscured by the surrounding grass. The trees shroud this corner of the cemetery in shadowy stillness. It is a peaceful place of reflection.
Under the loam, a corpse wastes away, feeds the feral growth above while the forgotten granite putrefies in a dense layer of grime, overgrown lawn, and mold.
Even the fruit from the nearby orchard (which I, in part, nourish) batters my stone to rot.
The sinister weight of filth and soil and stillness smothers his voice under all decay and I have lost my sight, my way to the world. The stonework is blind. It is concealed, masked in an unkempt prairie
The familiar has passed, but there are others now, separated by time, bound by genetic duty, or of curiosity.
It has been so long – those early visitors have joined the corpse somewhere. There are still others – if only I could be found. They may trim the grass and scrub the stone with a stiff brush and soapy water. Then I will see the sky again. |
The two voices, two perspectives, is a great technique for this theme. Very nice. I should give it a try sometime.
Thanks, Al. It just evolved that way. Some things aren’t intentional, but when you look back in revision, the “tweak” is alternating POV, and I got away with it…this time. LOL
Some writers may claim to be in complete control, but not I. Thankfully. :)
The italicized text next to the other gives a nice shifting perspective. Liked the image at the end of wishing for someone to clean the tombstone. Well done!
Thanks. The last image was the end I had in mind. Everything else fit in line with that. The Tombstones theme made me think of the perspective of the stone and I wanted to evoke sympathy for the granite.
Skillful and precise in the pov–really enjoyed this one, Randal.
Thank you, Susan.
It’s great how you focused on the physicality of the stone itself, it’s weight and how it too decays over time. Great phrases and words — feral growth, the tress shroud this corner. Peace…
Thanks, Linda. I really wanted to capture the stone’s POV.
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