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His walk is a catalogue of resentment. The old places are gone. There is Josef swings wide to avoid the sidewalk café tables, but not wide enough – We close on the 11th. – Condo? – Yes. – Assholes. No one hears. The joggers are faster in front of the Paris Star. Their eyes focus on At the bar, he argues hockey. He has one beer and leaves. |
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Urban decay by Guy Yasko
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A great twist–the environment making the transition before the character–well done!
Nice slant on what’s really decaying in the urban landscape.
I like your POV here, Guy and the creativity used to address this week’s theme. The opening line is fantastic and the entire tome has the pallor of your intended narrative. I like the included snippets of overheard dialogue, too. Very nice!
Ennui at its finest. Strong, strong opening, wish I had written it. Peace…
This made me think of Paris…
what room left for rebellion? but at least decay is a matter of perspective – nice.
Thanks everyone. The reads and comments are much appreciated.
Kelly —
I started this one as a piece about lefty tempests in a teapot of gentrification. In the end, i decided that was too complex for the format. I lifted one of the characters and stuck him in the last outpost of seediness in my old neighbourhood. I guess some of the political satire/self-critique remains in the empty gestures.
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