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She crushes out a cigarette on the patio. Shakes her head. “Trent’ll call soon,” I say. “You’ll see.” But we both know he won’t. The plane went down in the Hindu Kush. Over a week ago. Still missing. A celebrated pilot in the air force. That’s where we’d all met, Pensacola boot camp in 2005. Then Debbie and I both got pregnant. Return tickets home. We were lucky to score jobs at the Wal-Mart in Keene. She still doesn’t know it was the same guy. Trent. She lights another Marlboro. I grab it from her. Extinguish it. “It’s all I have,” she pleads. “Debbie don’t,” I say. “Think of your kid.” |
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Buried by Robert Vaughan
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Oh, I just love it when we know something one of the characters doesn’t. Nicely done, Robert.
great fervid pacing. you packed a ton in here in a very tiny space. you always hit me in the jaw and put a knife in my back with the ending. bravo, rv.
Hard, this one. Hard edges, hard to read. Which means really good.
Wow. Short and sharp. Excellent tale-spinning, Robert.
The spareness of the piece brings out the rhythms e.g. “Debbie don’t”, Trent. Nice pacing, too.
Lots to think about in this little story. Great.
Yes – not a word too may. Well done. I can see Lizabeth Scott in the film they never made …
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