Substitutions and Equivalencies by Marty Brick

1 c. buttermilk = 1 c. milk + 1 T. lemon juice
3 buttermilk pancakes = 1 Sunday morning
1 Sunday morning in bed making love to wife = 10,000 buttermilk pancakes
infidelity = 0 Sunday mornings in bed + many nights on couch
1 very tall woman = fantasy shared with George Constanza
1 redhead = any man’s fantasy
1 very tall redhead flirting with you for weeks = fate’s cruel trick, especially after diagnosis of “terminal”
lost chance to sow wild oats while young = comfort of knowing only her body in a perfect compact
confession to wife = clear conscience before death + angry wife + couch
last time made love to wife = can’t remember, I think missionary, that Tuesday before the diagnosis
desire to be able to determine the actual last time and to make it special = greatest desire + marker of forgiveness
being cheated on by dying husband = catch 22: how can you not forgive him but then, how can you love someone who uses a “get out of jail free” card on your heart?
3 buttermilk pancakes = each morning’s peace offering
1 month w/o sex = lifetime in cancerland w/o love
1 night she comes to the couch, sheds nightgown = acknowledgement that you are slipping away

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6 responses to “Substitutions and Equivalencies by Marty Brick

  1. I really like the way this form strips the story down and renders it stark, though not without domestic details.

  2. I usually don’t like this format as story, but there is such a deep story running through the lines that I liked it a lot. Nicely done.

  3. Kelly Grotke

    I think the form works too, because the equivalencies are so individual

  4. Darryl P.

    Unfolds beautifully, truthfully. Nice use of invention. It stays strong. Really good stuff.

  5. Pingback: Week #19 – The Last Time « 52|250 A Year of Flash

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