Nimbus by Glenn Blakeslee

In Elko the old Kawasaki threw a rod, and Poe watched as the man counted out two hundred dollars in wrinkled twenties while wheezing around an unlit slobber-soaked cigarette. With the money Poe bought a ticket and watched through the dirty window as the bus rolled a straight-line rift of red tarmac through sere hills dammed with rust-colored out-tailings topped with the sagging latticework frames of mining derricks. Later, as the bus wound the green barricade of the Sierra Nevada, he slept soundly for the first time in months.

In Vacaville Poe bought a soggy sandwich from a bus station machine, choked it down while sitting on a gum-spattered bench amongst people going nowhere, saying nothing. After thinking about nothing in particular while smoking his last cigarette, he bought a ticket to no place in particular.

In Eureka he stepped off the bus, hungry and in full crave, but instead of anything else he followed the highway over the inlet, seabirds coasting in a bitter wind over an incoming tide. He walked the road to where it ended and through dunes scattered with saltgrass and juniper down to the sea.

Poe sat in the sand leaning against the trunk of a redwood scoured clean of life, and he tied off for the last time. The sea rolled in long waves over coarse sand, the sky obscured by a nimbus of fog and particulate water, everything grainy and rough just the way he liked it, until the sun came out.

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8 responses to “Nimbus by Glenn Blakeslee

  1. The descriptions are like poetry surrounding Poe who walks through it, a goal in mind despite the vague path. Nice.

  2. very strong writing. this had a beautiful sadness to it.

  3. Gorgeous writing. Has a Into the Wild feel to it. Peace…

  4. Joanne Jagoda

    powerful piece, beautiful writing

  5. Kelly

    the strong visual emphasis and detail gave good support to the character, someone perhaps rediscovering their senses

  6. An eloquent feel and overall sadness which I admired. Nice touch.

  7. Michael

    Wonderful prose and a wonderful tale. My parents lived in Elko for years and while I was in college, I would spend my summer and christmas holidays working out at the goldmines just west out of town. So the first part of this story took me home. And, Glenn, you described it perfectly and beautifully! your prose took me by the hand and walked me through this with your common, everyman who is out of luck. A great story.

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