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all gone, ain’t gots, arreared
broke, busted, badda-binged
crapped out, crunched, congealed
down and out, dead duck, disgusted
eat beans, eat dirt, even eat shit
flat on your back or face in the gutter?
gone-gone, gutted, gazpachioed
helpless, homeless, haz-matted
iced, idled, ignored and iglooed
junked, jived, jazz-exorcised
kerplutted, kerplunked, kryptonited
listless, liver-lovin-low-down-lobotomized
(get the pic? now I’m ionized)
mauled, mutilated, misogynated
nadired, neutered, napalm-ized
osterized, ostrichized, oprah-squatted-upon
(do i get a discount to hell for having a coupon
to heaven at the pearly cash register’s long line?)
pissed on, pooped on, potter’s field bound
quit looking for quotes cause I’m
ratso-rizzoed, really now —
(you thought I got enough simile-ans on me to finish this sad
tale of woe? Like I tole’ you, I’m broke, bus
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Wow, 5 stars. tightly held to the theme, clever form.
Double wow. Agree with Randal. Well done! :-)
Brilliant, Walter. This just shines!
“all gone, ain’t gots…” EXCELLENT START! I love this. From title, to middle, to end. Way to go!
Love: “gone-gone, gutted, gazpachioed..”
Loved all of it, especially the cadence and wordplay. The discount to hell was a standout, too. Great piece.
incredible illiteration. loved the voice and the lyrical quality. i felt like swaying back and forth as i read it, sort of a boozy “99 bottles of beer on the wall” feeling. great job.
what beautiful parentheses
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