by | March 3, 2011 · 7:53 am
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Secret by Michelle Elvy

You saw me
and I saw you
and we smiled
but we said nothing
because we weren’t supposed to
see anything at all

I loved you
and you loved me
and we fucked
but we said nothing
because we weren’t supposed to
be anything at all

Now I see you
and you don’t see me
and I still want you
but I say nothing
because it’s not supposed to
mean anything at all

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7 responses to “Secret by Michelle Elvy”

  1. Alexandra Pereira
    March 4, 2011 at 9:29 am

    Loved this! The simplicity, the repetition… So much said in so few words! :-)

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  2. susan
    March 4, 2011 at 2:15 pm

    Michelle, you’ve nailed the essence of relationships here, the big difference between the “typical” male and female. Well done!

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  3. Claire King
    March 5, 2011 at 6:04 am

    Perfect and understated. This feels like a young voice; the complicity and the acquiescence. At the end I do want to give the narrator a little poke though, and whisper ‘speak up!’

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  4. ganymeder
    March 9, 2011 at 2:47 pm

    The repetition here worked so well. Nice one!

    Reply
  6. Tom Allman
    March 10, 2011 at 9:04 am

    For most people (the ones I like anyway) the physical act of love-making is a spiritual and sharing event. This poem recounts beautifully what happens when only partner acknowledges that fact. Thanks for Sharing.

    Reply

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