Attempt Number 24 by Talya Jankovits

Lying still and naked like a gutted fish, I feel his hands hold mine tightly, sweat prickling up between us in little round, shining beads. He whispers in my ear I love you, but all I can think of is a piñata, the way they stuffed me up with eggs – small, ugly and little, nothing like the decorative Easter eggs with pink and purple and polka dots – all of them fertilized in little dishes with his sperm; a sad and desperate little garden. Feeling broken now, torn up and hanging from a tree, as if its all going to spill out of me like the Red Nile. I know their names; taste them on my lips as he kisses me. His hand reaches to my thighs, speckled with needle punctures, then to my buttocks bruised from deep injections. It will be the same this month: hollowed and empty – the core of me dried up and shriveled like a prune. His breath tickles my ear lobe and I think don’t touch me.


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10 responses to “Attempt Number 24 by Talya Jankovits

  1. Oh my God. Gorgeous. Amazing. What a job. Phenomenal.

  2. I find this quite moving — brilliant similes/metaphors: a pinata as her self-image; her “desperate little garden” of fertilized eggs; her womb as a prune. Packs an amazing punch. Beautiful last line.

  3. So much sadness in this lyrical and poetic little piece, I could see the needle marks and feel her pain. Very good work!

  4. Very real, very intense.

  5. Talya, beautiful, beautiful honest rendering. This I know. The core of me withered like a prune. Don’t touch me. This IS the way it is. Peace…

  6. Maude Larke

    Vivid, poignant. Another ordeal for womankind well-represented.

  7. rebecca

    Unbelievably real and beautifully written. Well done.

  8. Pingback: Week #43 – To the core | 52|250 A Year of Flash

  9. Talya,

    This is excellent; breathtaking.

    Just like you!

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