This is not a Story by Martin Brick

…because a story has conflict. David Mamet asks, Who wants what from Whom?

Here our protagonist simply noticed a Facebook post. She commented on a friend’s status. An old mutual friend. One he never tried to find, because he knows it all. Distant city. Married. Kids. The mutual friend fills him in periodically.

Years ago they had a little thing. A thing that never blossomed. Back in college, where all things that make good memories come from.

If this were a story there would be conflict now. Her picture would lead him to dwell on some complicated drama that kept them apart. But in actuality, the story is dull. He was with a different girl for a while. And when they broke up, she was with someone. Kind of back and forth like that. The time was never right.

Or better, seeing her would lead him to dwell on the current state of his life. He’d be alone. Or with some shrew. The tiny profile picture would lead him to imagine another world, some immensely better parallel existence in which they lived like those sepia-toned couples who inhabit picture frames when you buy them.

But it didn’t. Our protagonist is fairly happy with his life. Sure he misses the girl. Sure he even pours a little whiskey after telling his own wife, I won’t be up too late. Lying. Sure, he does imagine the parallel world. He’s curious. A little melancholy. But not angry. Not really enough for a story.

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4 responses to “This is not a Story by Martin Brick

  1. Perfect portrayal of the reality of life. Nicely written, Martin.

  2. len kuntz

    this was very clever. a slice of life here. true tales, to be sure.

  3. Leah

    you’ve captured the the life, drama, and non-story stories of facebook

  4. Pingback: Week #46 – Another world | 52|250 A Year of Flash

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