Loneliness by Robert Vaughan

The two lovers recline, sweaty, exhausted, bodies entwined.

He clears his throat, says, “That was great. You’re really something, ya know?”

She arches her back, moves her leg off his. Whispers, “You too.” Now is not the time to get into it. She forces a smile, says, “I’ll be right back.”

“I’ll be here,” he says. Pats her butt as she stands up.

She stares into the bathroom mirror above the sink. My god, how you’ve changed. It’s not the deepening lines. Or her marble green eyes, getting weaker, fuzzy. It’s not the minute scar on her neck, her last melanoma removed.

Nothing will appease the growing pit in her stomach. It gnaws at her from the inside out. No longer a blind spot, it defines her.

.

Return to This Week’s Flash

17 Comments

Filed under Robert Vaughan

17 responses to “Loneliness by Robert Vaughan

  1. When I was a young man I never believed that I could be loney in a room full of people…Thanks for sharing.

  2. K

    What a beautifully melancholic tale! Thank you for sharing.

  3. Andrea

    Sad story…true story in the sense of loneliness even if you are with someone. Good job Robert!

  4. Theo

    Superb, the arc of sadness, and the combination of lovemaking and loneliness in such a short piece. Amazing work.

  5. “Now is not the time to get into it.” And you perfectly sketch how hard it is to find a time to “get into it.” I really like this piece. Nothing appeases loneliness that vast, not even such close togetherness.

  6. This story actually made me wince. When she got up and appraised herself in the mirror, after life had invaded her body, was very painful to read. Wonderful story Rob!

  7. Beautifully written. You’ve caught that moment that threatens like a storm cloud that we see, watch it pass by.

  8. Wow, her beauty mixed with her own self perception… Last line was powerful.

  9. len kuntz

    it felt like you were toggling with the pov’s. were you? normally that would take me out of the narrative, but it worked here.
    and i like how you leave a lot out and don’t stuff it down the reader’s throat trying to be too melodramatic.

  10. Shari

    Robert, you are publishing your work faster than I can keep up with you these days. I feel like the weekends just don’t have enough time to read you! I loved this one, speaks volumes in so few, carefully chosen words. Very powerful. I have send the link to many of my friends.

  11. No, she should not go back. She should open the window and climb up onto the basin and with her long limbs, jump outside and run away. Maybe she could jump into a Calvin Klein ad. Or maybe she should eat something. I am choosing to see this as a springboard to liberation in a Hamptons kind of way. So many possibilities here … !

  12. very spare, very effective. just enough mystery to keep the tension. and lots of melancholy, too. peace…

  13. Ow! In the best possible way.

  14. John Riley

    Beautiful and frightening at the same time. The blind spot on the inside. Great job.

  15. Alexandra Pereira

    Better to be alone than feel alone together.. Yes, beautiful and frightening at the same time. Nice work Robert. :-)

  16. Wish I had written this. Hat’s off.

  17. Pingback: Week # 47 – Blind Spot | 52|250 A Year of Flash

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s