Redux By Claire King

The first one convinced me that every vile thought I’d ever had about myself was true. The weight of his judgement crushed me slowly until I was so diminished I begged him to love me because I knew no-one else ever would.

When I found him again I peeled his tongue, word by contemptuous word, until he had nothing left but a scrappy shred of muscle flapping in his empty head, his eyes gaping and bewildered.

The second one could not bear to share me. He locked me in my lonely room where I waited for him to come. When finally he appeared, though, he was angry and threw rocks at my face.

When I found him again I took a poker from the fireplace while he slept and smashed his bones to powder. I sank my dog-teeth into his greasy jowls, spitting out his dead skin as I left.

I told the third one I could never love again. He smiled a sagacious smile and told me that is not the way.

‘You must re-write the end that should have been,’ he said. ‘I will be here when you get back.’ Then he sent me down dark labyrinths to find them again.

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32 responses to “Redux By Claire King

  1. Awesome, Claire. Just perfection.

  2. len kuntz

    this was jagged and barbed, my favorite kind of writing. we’re in it together. great job.

  3. Michelle

    Holy cow, Claire. This one shocks me even upon third and fourth reading. I am amazed by the places this piece explores. Labyrinths indeed.

  4. Debs Rickard

    A great flash on rejection, revenge, rebirth and revisiting! And I love the title – ‘Redux’. Perfection that had me re-reading – always a good sign in my book.

  5. When I found him again I peeled his tongue, word by contemptuous word, until he had nothing left but a scrappy shred of muscle flapping in his empty head, his eyes gaping and bewildered.

    This CHILLS the blood! I love it!

  6. Darryl P.

    So interesting! And the sentences come alive. Great.

  7. wow. just wow. this chills me to the core. peace…

  8. such a great twist: “You must re-write the end that should have been.”

  9. Wow, I’m glad I read this in the clear light of morning. Very dark and gruesome!

  10. Ooh … dog teeth into greasy jowls … memorable!

  11. Lou

    This felt far too good.

  12. What a great piece, Claire. Fantastic, dark/light, jagged/ smooth. Just amazing work.

  13. Gill Hoffs

    Uber creepy! Not a word of classic colours yet I felt I could see them all. Great.

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