| you’ll be gone forever and a day |
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| naw. just three oceans. once around the world |
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| you’ll meet mermaids and sirens |
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| yes. but my journey ends here, with you |
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| you’ll forget | |
| i’ll see you in the sea | |
| how do you know? | |
| because your eyes are in the sun your hips on every wave your breath the wind |
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| will you remember this? | |
| this i’ll remember most of all the space between your belly button and rib the distance from your shoulder to wrist the miles from knee down to toe |
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| ok then | |
| now shhhhh let me dive into your southern ocean |
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Wonderful form here. wonderfully complete metaphor to engage the theme. Bravo!
Beautiful. Lovely. Don’t know what else there is to say. Just lovely.
Beautiful; this reminds me of the conversation I had with my beloved before heading out to sea! Thank you for the Sunday morning smile.
Very sexy, very sad, a lament, just gorgeous. Autumnal on the waters of eternity.
Absolutely love this. It’s first-rate in every way.
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I love how the style ebbs back and forth like the tide. It’s cleverly crafted and of course, a relationship metaphored as nature and sea. So very well done, Michelle.
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