Stranger vultures of deadening ash-pits the thin strangled birds heightened to stand the now silent birds of prey Slowly the dotted figures crested the hill |
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Missa Frequentia by Walter Bjorkman
Filed under Walter Bjorkman
Stranger vultures of deadening ash-pits the thin strangled birds heightened to stand the now silent birds of prey Slowly the dotted figures crested the hill |
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Filed under Walter Bjorkman
Eerie scene, Walter! I really liked the rhythm in the line, “the thin strangled birds heightened to stand.” The swirling birds and sounds worked together to catch me up in the dark vision.
evocative and darkly lyric writing…the raptors standing upon prayers image is wonderful. Poe, Shirley Jackson (The Lottery) and a hint of Gatsby weave together in this haunting ode.
Nicely dark, nicely done.
spooky and dark. great job, walt.
What is it about vultures? (Fascinating.) On top of that, stranger ones! There is something here that I’m not accessing yet, so I have to come back to. It’s like the secret under-layer: a beckoning. (Thinking my brain is just too weary, everyone else knows… don’t! Don’t tell me. I want to figure it out myself.) I really like the mood and imagery – everything I can see on the surface.
nice parallels between the crowd of the air and that of the sky, held together by religion and death
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relying on great influences, the darkness present, the mood so brilliantly, deftly conveyed.
Thanks everyone. This is a re-working of an old one that I got inspired, if that is the word, after watching the news for the first time in many many months. Death everywhere, not just the quake & tsunami.